Alright here comes page 11 with it's sets of surprises... :). I'm quite happy of the forest background, I'm less satisfied with Laiyos... I think I'll need a few pages before I get his facial lines correctly...
Just out of curiosity, how many of you guessed this is how things where gonna turn after the previous 10 pages ? Just wondering if it was obvious or not (I hope not too much at least)
So like announced way before the first page, the heroic fantasy story is about to begin... I hope you'll enjoy reading it as much as I enjoy drawing and writing it. Those knowing me are already aware that I'm very fond of epic tales and adventures...
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Vast |
Awesome, as always. The detail work on his armor looks great, and his expression is amazing. The pages keep getting better. ^_^
04 Mar 2003 08:47:04
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Aeon |
Not bad at all! i admire yr spirit of creating something yr own. So, this my comments hope u will consider it. The color or environment setting was great! i like it, but beware when u modied the photo realitics graphic as yr backdrop.(Size relationship is the keypoint :') ) Yr forest with the small fire doesnt look convincing as explosion. The flow of yr story might be great but now u r doing a comic so take note on how to create desire for the user to guess yr story or to find out what it is. (Camera shot need to be well plan, almost all are direct target shot, no other meaning then direct message-- Desire is the key! :') ) And yr character skill need to be practise more, try to avoid drawing the same pose, and try to focus on different part when needed, --try some extreme close up, close up, ...) and try shotting environment or none related object, it can tell the mood of the story and giving more space for user imagination. :') --user need to take part in yr story! then your story will be success! observe how those gd film shot a scene, u will learn from it, but i will still encourage u to come out something from all yr observation. Emotion doesnt only mean face expression, but also mean gesture.
I develop my own game and 3d animation so i like to share something with those ppl like u so See ya! And keep it on.
04 Mar 2003 11:04:41
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Saiyan |
Aeon : Thanks for the long and very informative comment. You're right of course, I need to make more varied shots... I know it, I try to but like everything it takes time :)))... and I really want to go on with minimum a page per week. As per the fire, it has nothing to do with the previous explosion... those are two separate places, and Laiyos is waking up in the middle of the forest, and there is a small camp fire...
Thanks Again. Don't hesitate to email me more suggestion, I'd be glad to discuss them with you.
04 Mar 2003 22:23:20
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Saiyan |
Thanks Vast :).
04 Mar 2003 22:23:48
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GKar |
Excellent!
Very good work. The fire scene is great!
I would have seen Laiyos raising his hands to protect himself and looking higher, but it's good.
Keep up!
05 Mar 2003 05:19:25
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Saiyan |
G'Kar : I actually thought of it... but then I remembered that 95% when I wake up from a nightmare, even though I was in movement in it, I usually am not following the position that was experienced in the nightmare. Though it happened once :)... I crushed my feet on the border of the window while making a mawashi geri in a dream... HURTED like hell :). But maybe it would have been better to see Laiyos reach out with its hands or something...
05 Mar 2003 06:16:29
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Axel |
Nice, keep up the Good Work ^_^
05 Mar 2003 07:14:44
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Cep |
Excellent work, i like it very much.
The details of the forest are really good, as the armor o Laiyos.
05 Mar 2003 15:33:55
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Aeon |
:') Sorry for my misunderstanding... keep it up! u had so many supporters!
07 Mar 2003 11:18:14
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Cloud |
Exellent, as always.
10 Mar 2003 22:32:19
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Zeus |
good story, weird one but good. I suggest that the two, evil and good, would fusion as one, the good guy having some evil thoughts and unusual actions, fighting himself... anyway, nice shot, go on like that... why don't you produce it in a real BD or somethin like that??....
14 Mar 2003 04:59:29
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evan |
sorry bout that 9 i thought he was dead
24 May 2003 22:13:17
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Wraith |
I kinda expected it to end like that...
11 Oct 2003 22:02:24
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Anonymous |
Hmm... the storyline just took a turn :) Awsome once again!
14 Oct 2003 05:04:56
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$traith |
I like the animation, and the characters are really cool, but you need to work on your story line a bit.otherwise i think that it's excellent ;)
15 Oct 2003 20:57:48
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Frank |
beautifull painting, but the story is a bit weird. I don't really understand it.
07 Nov 2003 15:50:53
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sean |
WowChris!!Nice flames they look real!Oh ya sweeeeeet armor!
12 May 2004 05:29:52
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K9 Darkice |
Wonderfull as always...keep it going Chris \m/
06 Aug 2004 03:28:27
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kitori |
I was right!
By the way, you mght not want to concintrate so much on the face in your manga, you want to bring in the rest of the body and change views, or have the characters pop out of the page a little more so it seems like they dominate the frames. Hope you like the tips.
02 Oct 2004 05:57:52
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B_layk |
SWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET!!!!!!!!!!!
18 Jun 2005 07:32:51
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qwerqwa |
27 Jul 2005 21:27:08
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r3d3 |
hey, that fire is awesome looking!
01 Aug 2005 04:43:08
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Another |
25 Aug 2005 01:24:11
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