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Il Mago |
Though I donīt understand this kind of art yet... I do like what I see..
Background is great especially the very 1st image on page 1 I also like the strain effect...great work man.
14 Jan 2003 00:21:44
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GKar |
Very good! The one slightly negative thing I could find is that I think you should add some effect to show the characters movements; especially in the middle picture (maybe as you did in the 1st one in this page).
Anyway great job as always...
14 Jan 2003 02:53:24
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Cloud |
Although a bit inferior in the quality of the drawing compared to the preceeding pages, I still think you're doing a great job, Chris.
14 Jan 2003 03:32:44
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Saiyan |
Thanks... and you're all too generous ;). This page is inferior to the other ones I agree... but I only have one week to post pages, I'm sure you prefer watching a continuing story rather than seeing me make infinite corrections to my art and give you one page a month or so ;) ... This is an action scene and I kinda lost my past touch there... it's been ages since I drew that kinda stuff and it shows... hopefully it will be better with time. Let's just say that if I had to be satisfied at 80% of my work to publish a page, this page wouldn't have been published this week... but it's better that the story goes on, in any case I need to practice... I will make some better pages, and I have no doubt I'll make some less nicer pages too... Art is like mood... it swings :).
14 Jan 2003 03:55:55
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JM |
Yes we can see you're less comfortable on action scene, but it looks good.
14 Jan 2003 18:56:07
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Codexus |
Very nice! Keep them coming! I wanna know what happens next!
15 Jan 2003 00:55:40
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J.A.D. |
hey chris nice work... BUT I REALLY HOPE THAT THE STORY WILL NOT END HERE AND OUR HERO DIE IN THE FIRST 4 PAGES:p:p:p:p quick find a solution to deffeet that bad guy
16 Jan 2003 01:44:34
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younes |
16 Jan 2003 02:41:29
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Shinji |
Teah, a bit inferior, but this is the way it has to be to deilver pages in an acceptable time. It's still excellent, better than 95% of the manga around there.
The "Holy Dragons" is funny ;)
Please, keep drawing, keep drawing, don't waste time reading our comments ;)
16 Jan 2003 17:45:36
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Shinji |
I was thinking, the first think I saw missing was the effect of the puch in the face of Kyrian: it should distort his face a lot more to give a good effect.
Also, an index of the pages would be appreciated instead of clicking Next a few times.
16 Jan 2003 17:49:23
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AMP |
WOW!!! I'm bookmarking your site now. This is amazing...
17 Jan 2003 15:35:03
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Saiyan |
J.A.D. : No worries there my friend, Laiyos ain't gonna die any day soon :).
17 Jan 2003 20:29:30
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Saiyan |
J.A.D. : No worries there my friend, Laiyos ain't gonna die any day soon :).
17 Jan 2003 21:18:04
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Nooke Brotkin |
Hi Chris. I'm not giving any rating as of yet, since the story has just begun and I think it's much too early to make any judgements - except that the art is simply wonderful!
As for the story line... well, I think it's a little childish and uninspired. I wonder if it's a good thing to make the main character encounter the bad guy in the very beginning? Anyway there hasn't really "happened" anything in the first four pages, they have been spent in cliche-filled monologue/dialogue. I prefer a start where multiple characters are introduced in the middle of their everyday life.
Still it looks quite good for your manga. Keep up the work, I'll keep checking it out!
18 Jan 2003 01:24:53
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Saiyan |
Nooke : Well, you said it yourself, it's only 4 pages, and I can assure you the story you see here has a meaning and things will get clearer later on. I personally HATE stories where you are spoiled by giving the background and everything, I almost did this with an intro page and then decided not to do it... I prefer learning about a story while it's actually happening, just like in the movie : The Matrix... don't tell me you weren't lost the first 45 minutes ??? would have it been fun if they told you that Trinity was fighting agents of machines controlling the Earth and the human race ? nope it wouldn't have :)...
Thanks a lot for your input.
18 Jan 2003 02:03:11
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J.A.D. |
hey chris, don't u think it is kinda illogical to keep pressing NEXT each time to swich to another page? now it is ok but immagin when u will be in like 20 pages...Daaa y don't u create links like JUMP TO PAGE... or just make links with the page number (ex:PAGE10 PAGE 11 PAGE 20) I think it will be easier and faster for us... thanks:D
18 Jan 2003 02:09:26
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Wildcard |
Exciting :D
18 Jan 2003 17:06:36
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21 Jan 2003 19:56:30
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$hAdoW |
ok i think im gonna turn the computer off cause it begins to be a little more SUPERBE for me ... =)
21 Jan 2003 19:58:53
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raven |
love it im gona look on !
11 May 2003 11:16:51
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evan |
*stares*hour later awesome how does he(chris) *cofused*
24 May 2003 21:51:36
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SSDragon |
Well done, but I think you could have used more force in that attack. It kinda looks like air hit Laiyos and not that guy's fist.
29 May 2003 00:09:46
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Anonymous |
19 Aug 2003 06:45:18
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Matoki |
WOW!THIS ROCKS!I CANT STOP READING IT!Im bout to go read page 5 now :D
19 Aug 2003 06:46:17
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Sharky |
I like it, but it will be hard to get it published because youll have to get permission to use DBZ's copyrighted image.
25 Aug 2003 08:36:01
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Saiyan |
Sharky : I dont think so. There is resemblance maybe, but there is no ripping off any DBZ material, inspired by it : yes, delibaretly copying it : NO ! ... I'm doing something different and it will quickly show (I think it already does).
25 Aug 2003 13:01:52
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Mooch Dog |
The face in the second frame ruins this whole page, and the dialogue has got to be changed, excellent effects and background though
10 Nov 2003 12:43:49
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dragon |
hey i like youur style even those theres always room for improvement i can see you are dbz inspired so am i thats how i started but i got better and developed my own style i am an excellent animatior but but novice in photoshop but like your effects its damn good hit me up on my email i would like to know some of your techniques i think we might be be able to connect my email jamal601@hotmail.com
04 Dec 2003 10:57:52
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Anonymous |
Well to me it seems that the bad guy looks a bit like Laiyos.. does anyone else notice?
29 May 2005 11:01:23
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04 Jan 2006 16:56:22
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nick |
what's up with the phrase "That is just a but taste of the suffering awaiting you"?
12 Feb 2006 00:46:12
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nick |
sorry I ment on the page before this one!lol!
12 Feb 2006 00:47:37
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